Mount Wachusett Community College, in Gardner MA offers a 2-year program for Graphic and Interactive Designer students. This final course in the GID program helps students assemble and present their best work produced in the program. This blog is produced by the GID Portfolio class under the direction of instructor Coni Porter.
Project 3 - Revised - Henry David Thoreau Swan - Nicole Wetherby
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Here is the before and after. Updated the quote and re-worked the masking.
I think the rework is great, and the way the quote is set up is neat, I'm guessing you sampled colors from the one of the darker leaves for the text? (good call if so)
Vast improvements on the design. Now it feels up to speed with the rest of your work. My only issue is the gap after the word "are". Is there a way you can resize anything to make that disappear? Also, I'd suggest using a longer dash before Thoreau's name.
Yes, the over-feathered foreground in your original was, well, over-feathered. But... you have gone from one extreme to the other, with possibly over-sharpened edges now. Is there a compromise between the two that would allow us to still understand that the swans, as seen through the lens, is MORE in focus than our foreground? As this has improved in some ways, I wonder if the clever visual message has been lost.
I think the rework is great, and the way the quote is set up is neat, I'm guessing you sampled colors from the one of the darker leaves for the text? (good call if so)
ReplyDeleteVast improvements on the design. Now it feels up to speed with the rest of your work. My only issue is the gap after the word "are". Is there a way you can resize anything to make that disappear? Also, I'd suggest using a longer dash before Thoreau's name.
ReplyDeleteYes, the over-feathered foreground in your original was, well, over-feathered. But... you have gone from one extreme to the other, with possibly over-sharpened edges now. Is there a compromise between the two that would allow us to still understand that the swans, as seen through the lens, is MORE in focus than our foreground? As this has improved in some ways, I wonder if the clever visual message has been lost.
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